For the first time, I decided to rewrite a story. The motivation for this was the desire to publish it on Literotica. It's always been one of my more popular stories, given the feedback, but some aspects of it didn't work for me. The ending seemed too abrupt, even given that it's intended to be a surprise. I asked a couple of Literotica friends to help figure out what was wrong, and they helped me to understand what was not working about it, and gave me some very specific suggestions on how to improve the story overall. They are both excellent writers, and you should read their stuff on Lit. They are redgarters and EmilyMiller.
The new version is here: The Prince