Mentor: Page 3 - Fantasies of Seduction

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oldfan

helen While reading...: "No. Before that. When Anita gave me her number. " I think that's Ann...

helen

oldfan Thanks!

helen

Halloween approaches!

oldfan

"Remind me again what TSF stands for?" Remind me too, please.

helen

Ah. I might want to tweak to make that a bit clearer. Alex refers (referred) to herself as Kayla's "token straight friend" back in chapter 11 and as TSF in chapter 12, but without any clear connection between the two.

oldfan

helen slaps forehad

helen

I added a line.

Alex: "Oh sh!t I am in trbl."
Self-censoring "shit" in a text message made me laugh.

Me: "Need to get ready or I won't be joining you."
Alex: "Pls join. ur TSF will be sadface."

My token straight friend has the weirdest sense of humor.

fmerommel

Just finished reading it! Another favorite of this series. The rapport and joking between Kayla and Alex is so genuine. I will need to go back and reread their first encounter. Also love the last paragraph as Kayla reflects on her transformative past few months. Its one of the great things about college towns while you're young, but then also how you can start feeling old very quickly haha

helen

fmerommel I have to admit I really liked the banter. Kayla hasn't had much opportunity to show her inner geek. When I was writing it I heard Alex's voice with the upward lilt in her tone (apparently it's called uptalk, upspeak, or high rising terminal, none of which I knew when I started), but it was so clear in my head that I had to go back and rework chapter 4 to include it. And the texts were hugely fun.

helen

And chapter 14 slides into view. Things happen. Next week is Halloween.

fmerommel

At first from the title I thought that Kayla would fall for her hair stylist hahaha. But glad Val got her shot with her. I am also super curious about this mysterious redhead hanging with Anita. I am definitely rooting for Anita and Kayla to make it in the end but still a lot of story and sexcapades to happen...also curious why Heather is still so uncomfortable /nervous around Anita. Wondering if that angle might also play into the final 4 chapters.

helen

I definitely wanted Elaine to be middle-aged and out of the likely dating pool, because I like the idea of her being motherly and of a different generation while being completely in tune with the needs of the younger generation. Who knows, maybe she has a daughter who keeps her up-to-date, but I don't even think that's needed. She clearly takes her profession very seriously, with the books and photos and style ideas.

As for Heather, I think the reason for her discomfort will be found more in her story (Entanglement, chapters 3-4) than anything in Mentor. Had it been any of the other women she'd probably have shrugged it off by now, but Heather gets embarrassed so easily.

fmerommel

Oh yes I remember! It was Margot's conversation with Heather about Anita that got me so excited to read more about her here. Fingers crossed that she gets a happy ending with Kayla hehe

helen

fmerommel Also I meant to mention that the "clarifications" of Heather's discomfort around Anita in chapters 16 and 17 were always part of the story. I didn't add them after the comments, I just didn't want to spoil the upcoming passages. As long as Anita was single, Heather couldn't avoid thinking about what might have been. Now that Anita's no longer a free agent, Heather doesn't feel that there's any reason to be nervous around her.

helen

Chapter 15, "Spirits," is another chapter that was both fun to write and uncomfortable, like "Sunshine," the second part of the tryst with Michelle. For some reason I'd also done a terrible job of the mechanics of writing. Grammar and spelling mistakes and ugly constructions throughout. I had thought last week that the chapter was very close to being ready to release, but I must have spent longer polishing it than any other so far.

Anyway, I hope you all enjoy it. The end of the saga draws close!

fmerommel

Loved this chapter! You write drama really well. It's so different from everything else that your normal work that its refreshing to read. Fi deserved that ending but I could still empathize with how she felt at the end...and the whole Halloween party scene was so fun. With all of the fun cameos (so happy to see Alex breaking out of her shell), the dancing, and the scorching kiss from Kennedy. Would love to see another chance for them together but that would also be breaking the rules haha. Also with 3 chapters left there's not much story to tell. I know Anita will get at least one, possible two of the final chapters. So trying to guess who might be the lucky one with Kayla in the 3rd. Either way I'm totally hooked and cannot wait 🙂

helen

There are only three chapters left, but I hope there are still some surprises ahead. I've already worked on Chapter 16, and it's ready to go, but I'm sticking to my rules and won't release it until next Friday.

The only spoiler I will give is that its title is "Rules"

fmerommel

Haha now I'm even more intrigued. I'm seriously so glad you released these week to week. A series like this is best savored as a story of the week, and love that they're released on a Friday to kick off the weekend

helen

Since Thursday is Thanksgiving, I'm thinking about releasing the next chapter on Thursday. Of course it will mean waiting 8 days for the subsequent one.

helen

Chapter 16 online! No spoilers in this message, but don't feel the need to avoid them once you've read it. And a very happy Thanksgiving to all!

fmerommel

Wow. Probably one of the best chapters yet. It was both heart warming and crazy passionate. The conspiracy in the coffee shop was brilliantly written. I did not see it coming. And then the twist on the Star Wars quote at the very end had me laughing out loud. Seriously so good. Excited to see where the final 2 chapters go. Happy Thanksgiving!

helen

fmerommel Thanks! Yeah, you can probably tell that this chapter was a major one for me. It brings to a close two storylines at Gabby's. Anita's life has revolved around the club since the first chapter of Entanglement, and Gabby's has been a major part of Kayla's life since Anita introduced her to it. So they're both going to be going through bigger changes than most new couples, but I think they're up for the challenge 🙂

I liked that Kayla could finally be affectionate with her partner without feeling guilty or having to moderate her desire, and after a couple of years of casual hookups, Anita was certainly ready for more.

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